Venus.

I dreamed

in Venus

a darkness without a place

in mistier

all-the-dead

feet at our bones

in our graves

the acacia weeps

we, like Ophelia,

fall then drown

but, madness is not

without a place

the sea waits

and severs the

white lines of the sun,

and leaf, I toe,

to rock, to tree and

eolith bones

to mercies

this eye of death

reddens the night

but, madness is not

without a place.

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Written for the dVerse open link night.


  30 comments for “Venus.

  1. July 23, 2020 at 4:31 pm

    Really liked the transition from the day to the night but all engulfed in the dark. Sad but true sometimes. Darkness knows no place. Spectacular!

    Liked by 3 people

    • July 23, 2020 at 5:36 pm

      Thank you, Kumar. I so appreciate your thoughts. ❤️

      Liked by 1 person

  2. July 23, 2020 at 4:36 pm

    ‘the sea waits
    and severs the
    white lines of the sun,’
    Amazing lines and wonderful piece following your dark trail of thoughts.
    Jay

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  3. July 23, 2020 at 5:49 pm

    this is deeply profound … those knowing madness often have profound talents!

    Liked by 3 people

  4. Rhen Laird
    July 23, 2020 at 5:57 pm

    WOW, just WOWWWW….

    Liked by 3 people

    • July 23, 2020 at 5:58 pm

      Aww, thank you truly. ❤️❤️ I’m smiling.

      Like

      • Rhen Laird
        July 23, 2020 at 7:15 pm

        What a lovely SMILE!!

        Liked by 1 person

      • July 23, 2020 at 8:54 pm

        😊 ❤

        Liked by 1 person

  5. scotthastiepoet
    July 23, 2020 at 6:34 pm

    I like the sense, all the while, of passionate other worldy ache in this, Lucy… Loved it and will be bacck for more…

    Liked by 2 people

    • July 23, 2020 at 6:36 pm

      I’m so glad to hear that. Thank you for your analysis and thoughts. I’m especially happy to hear that you’ll be back for more. ❤️

      Like

  6. sanaarizvi
    July 23, 2020 at 6:59 pm

    This is incredibly potent! I love; “the acacia weeps we, like Ophelia, fall then drown but, madness is not without a place.”❤️

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    • July 23, 2020 at 8:55 pm

      Aww, thank you. I’m happy you like those lines; they happen to be one of my favorite ones as well in this poem.

      Like

  7. July 23, 2020 at 8:15 pm

    Oh Lucy, these three lines are brilliant, they vividly caressed my imagination….
    “the sea waits
    and severs the
    white lines of the sun,”

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    • July 23, 2020 at 8:53 pm

      Thank you so much, Ivor. I’m so glad you liked those lines in this piece. ❤

      Liked by 1 person

  8. July 23, 2020 at 10:05 pm

    I love these lines. Such a great image!
    the sea waits

    and severs the

    white lines of the sun,

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  9. July 24, 2020 at 3:22 am

    I love the way this poem takes me into a blend of the familiar and unfamiliar, like dreams themselves: unfamiliar Venus juxtaposed with familiar Ophelia. I also love the lines:
    ‘…I toe,
    to rock, to tree and
    eolith bones’
    all pointing to the final allusion to madness.

    Liked by 2 people

  10. July 24, 2020 at 7:52 am

    Yes, madness has a place, especially when the world seems so mad. Poor Ophelia! Great poem.

    Liked by 2 people

    • July 24, 2020 at 7:53 am

      Thank you so much. ❤️

      Like

  11. July 24, 2020 at 4:47 pm

    love those last two lines and how you could slant your interpretation in different ways (K)

    Liked by 1 person

  12. July 24, 2020 at 5:48 pm

    You had me at the first line, so profound and I love your word choices in this piece.

    Liked by 1 person

    • July 24, 2020 at 5:49 pm

      I’m so glad. Thank you for your feedback, Mish. ❤ ❤

      Like

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