drowning.

as through I dream

the dying things

and brambles

hunch with elbows

of the moon’s hoofbeats

on my white fingers;

mouthfuls of red

or shadows

to the mid-drowning

of the dream, I died once

in the ghost of the sea

you kill me.

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Written for the dVerse prompt: Write a quadrille using the word Bramble in any form thereof, or even one you create containing the word.


62 thoughts on “drowning.

  1. I’m so glad you see brambles as hunched things with elbows, Lucy – me too! I love the image of ‘the moon’s hoofbeats / on my white fingers’ and the idea of dying ‘in the ghost of the sea’.

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    1. Hahaha! Hey, I’m not alone here! Whew! 😃

      So glad you liked those lines, Kim–those were my favorite to write. Thank you so much for your kind thoughts! Always appreciated.

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    1. That is true, Kumar, for this piece. 😀 The last few lines deal with how love can consume so much of a person. Therefore, it “kills” them or who they once were. Thank you so much for your feedback!

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  2. Your wordsmanship, as noted, is rich and sensual. You had me at the “moon’s hoofbeats”, as off beat as a “penguin’s pistol” perhaps. Nice job .

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    1. Why, thank you!

      “You had me at the “moon’s hoofbeats”, as off beat as a “penguin’s pistol” perhaps.”

      Now THAT’S quite the image indeed. Penguin’s pistol… Hmm… “Penguin’s got a gun, his whole world’s come undone.” 😁

      Thank you for your feedback and thoughts!

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    1. Ah, hahaha! I suppose so, Beverly. Some lessons are very hard to learn.

      Thank you so much for the kind words and the laugh. I needed that today. ❤

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