drowning.

as through I dream

the dying things

and brambles

hunch with elbows

of the moon’s hoofbeats

on my white fingers;

mouthfuls of red

or shadows

to the mid-drowning

of the dream, I died once

in the ghost of the sea

you kill me.

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Written for the dVerse prompt: Write a quadrille using the word Bramble in any form thereof, or even one you create containing the word.




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63 replies

  1. I’m so glad you see brambles as hunched things with elbows, Lucy – me too! I love the image of ‘the moon’s hoofbeats / on my white fingers’ and the idea of dying ‘in the ghost of the sea’.

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  2. The last line. Maybe the dream of every lover who has ever loved.
    Spectacular writing Lucy. 😇

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  3. Lucy, what a dark and beautifully penned poem. Thanks for joining us!

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  4. Eerie and lovely at the same time.
    ….elbows

    of the moon’s hoofbeats

    on my white fingers;

    I love that phrase.

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  5. My favoured of yours. Couldn’t tell you why, but this one left me an inch somewhere else.

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  6. Your wordsmanship, as noted, is rich and sensual. You had me at the “moon’s hoofbeats”, as off beat as a “penguin’s pistol” perhaps. Nice job .

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    • Why, thank you!

      “You had me at the “moon’s hoofbeats”, as off beat as a “penguin’s pistol” perhaps.”

      Now THAT’S quite the image indeed. Penguin’s pistol… Hmm… “Penguin’s got a gun, his whole world’s come undone.” 😁

      Thank you for your feedback and thoughts!

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  7. This is strikingly beautiful, Lucy! ❤️ I love the image of the “moon’s hoofbeats.” Inspired 🙂

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  8. That’s what happens when you eat a heavy meal before going to bed!! Jokes aside, this is great hair-raising poetry.

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  9. Wowza, what a poem!

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  10. I like your dreamy take on the prompt Drowning would be a real nightmare indeed. Grasping at the moon’s hoofbeats on the water above only to go on down.

    I died once
    in the ghost of the sea

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  11. So like how the images shift in this – each image rushing on to the next – a bit like drowning I guess. Very nice.

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  12. hauntingly deep you use words in a wondrous way ❤

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  13. Wow! I loved this poem ❤️ The moon’s hoofbeats … wonderful imagery

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  14. I died once

    in the ghost of the sea

    Love that. Your brambles are another dark fairy tale.

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  15. Every reward comes with a price. This one certainly is sinister.

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  16. Love can trample, love can consume us, and at the same time a lover knows the sweetness of love

    Much🍇love

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  17. I died once in the ghost of the sea…🐚

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  18. I spent several moments thinking about that intense and beautiful line of your poetry. Tyvm for sharing it.

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  19. Sounds so sorrowful. Nicely written

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  20. kaykuala

    Such is the power of the berries to make one go through the difficulties for the mouthful red all for the fun of it. Wonderful lines Lucy!

    Hank

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  21. This is a powerful piece…drowning in love. Perfect imagery.

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  22. ooooooh. such magical imagery. that last line is so powerful

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  23. Reblogged this on johncoyote and commented:

    Amazing poetry.

    Like

  24. Hello dear Lucy. I loved your work today. I hope you are enjoying the days of Summer.

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