i am alone; the skull of rocks
grimace at the clown winter. In the starry epitaph,
I wash this blood from my hands;
the moon is my child
and the shore is a memory
exiled; entering alone,
it bares the imitation
epithet, known as our death-
sentence.
Dreams atrophied like
the first bite of the apple,
and the last of the black lily;
broken minds, let the worms kill us
why not? The midday star falls like a bolide
in a selfhood of breasted
dismay.
© 2020 lucysworks.com All Rights Reserved.
Written for the dVerse prompt: Write a poem using the word clown or a word – real or created – with clown as the root.
oh my….this is dark. These words particularly resonated with me:
“Dreams atrophied like
the first bite of the apple,
and the last of the black lily”
LikeLiked by 5 people
I’m glad it could resonate a bit, Lillian. Thank you for reading my poem. ❤️
LikeLike
“the shore is a memory exiled” is chilling if it means what I think it does.
LikeLiked by 3 people
Thank you for reading my piece and for today’s dVerse prompt. It’s really unique!
Now, I’m curious, what do you think that line means?
I was thinking of the river of Lethe and forgetfulness in this piece. It’s the overall theme in this poem—memories and how losing them is either good/bad over time; along with how we can feel our identity is misplaced.
LikeLiked by 1 person
You’re welcome. My guess on the line was more literal, where another flood comes and the concept of the shore is a memory exiled.
LikeLiked by 1 person
This is beautiful
LikeLiked by 2 people
Thank you. 🥰
LikeLike
So many things to love in this darkness, I see the death of Snow White in the bite of the apple, I can hear the death rattle of my nightmares and feel the scent from the graveyard… splendid.
LikeLiked by 4 people
Thank you so very much!
LikeLike
There’s Shakespeare in this too, Hamlet and Macbeth, as well as Biblical and classical allusions. Dark but captivating.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you so much! 🙂
LikeLiked by 1 person
We are definitely not at the circus here! I love your response to this prompt and how you used it to explore the dark spaces of our existence.
LikeLiked by 2 people
No circuses here at the writing workshop of horrors! Hahaha.
Thank you for the kind comment. I love your interpretation of my poem. ❤
LikeLiked by 2 people
Your poem is non-linear and darker than the inside of a bat cave. I love the close “the midday star falls like a bolide in a selfhood of breasted dismay”. Thanks for the word “bolide”. I will us it soon, if I can remember it. I have often thought about choosing 6 obscure words from the dictionary, and building a poem around them.
LikeLiked by 2 people
Aww, thank you Glenn. I’m so ecstatic to hear that!
LikeLike
you are a total enigma … such a bright cheerful positive person who writes so darkly!
LikeLiked by 2 people
Aww, I’m flattered. 😀 Thank you so much!
LikeLiked by 1 person
keep intriguing 🙂
LikeLiked by 1 person
I sense a lot of regret pulsing through the lines of this poem, dark and beautiful! ✨
LikeLiked by 1 person
There’s definitely remorse, you’re right! Thank you so much for your wonderful comment. 🥰
LikeLiked by 1 person
love this, especially:
‘Dreams atrophied like
the first bite of the apple’
LikeLiked by 1 person
Aww, thank you!
LikeLike
So dark and blood thirsty, it makes my skin crawl, and clap my hands, smiles. I also like that word break of death-
sentence. Fabulous writing Lucy!
LikeLiked by 2 people
Thank you so much, Grace. I’m very happy you enjoyed it! 🥰
LikeLike
Very good poem! I loved the line…
Dreams atrophied like
the first bite of the apple,
and the last of the black lily;
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you! 😀
LikeLiked by 2 people
bolide… not the first time you got me running for the wiktionary. your wordhoard is vast
LikeLiked by 1 person
Hahaha! Aww, thank you. I’m flattered. 😊
LikeLiked by 1 person
I agree with Jane about the echoes of Shakespeare, the Bible and mythology, Lucy. Your poem is deliciously dark and I love the way you springboard from Lady Macbeth’s bloody hands into the realms of memory. My favourite lines are:
‘i am alone; the skull of rocks
grimace at the clown winter’,
which hint at the loneliness of old age and dementia, which is confirmed in ‘the shore is a memory exiled’ and ‘broken minds’. I also love the phrase ‘a selfhood of breasted dismay’ – I know that feeling.
LikeLiked by 2 people
Thank you, Kim! ☺️
LikeLiked by 1 person
kaykuala
it bares the imitation
epithet, known as our death-sentence.
It appears to be turning gory but there is a lot of humour within your seriouness of write! Wonderful twist to it Lucy!
Hank
LikeLiked by 1 person
Glad you could see the humor in it, Hank! Thank you for your feedback and kindness. ❤️
LikeLike
I love the way you split “death sentence”!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thanks!
LikeLike
Dark and enticing writing. A lot of exceptional phrasing.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you so much!
LikeLike
Suitably creepy.
Now that the peaceful pub has closed down, my new blog is at:
https://farragoexpress.wordpress.com/
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thanks! 😀
And, thank you for letting me know. I just gave you a follow. ❤
LikeLiked by 1 person
So many allusions in this dark mystery which can be interpreted variously! I really enjoyed it, Lucy.
LikeLiked by 2 people
I’m so glad to hear that, Punam, especially from you. It’s an honor. Thank you for reading my poem. ❤️
LikeLiked by 1 person
Lucy, you are very kind. My pleasure to read your words. ❤️
LikeLiked by 1 person
This was engaging, dark, and wonderful Lucy…
LikeLiked by 1 person
Aww, thank you. ❤ ❤
LikeLike
that dreams atrophied line clenches the heart. stirring write, Lucy
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you. 🥰
LikeLiked by 1 person
am alone; the skull of rocks
grimace at the clown winter’,
Dreams atrophied like
the first bite of the apple,
—-Dark and raw and shivery! I love it! The shadow side of life.
LikeLiked by 2 people
Thank you! 😀
LikeLiked by 1 person
Extraordinary imagery and beautiful words from your soul!!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you. ❤️
LikeLiked by 1 person
You’re welcome 🙂
LikeLiked by 1 person