leaves are falling.

the moon is
phallus-shaped
to split leaves—
are falling to my hands;
throats of autumnal death,
I kiss your hands.

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Written for the dVerse prompt: “What is your idea of an erotic poem? What makes it stimulating? In your own words describe the fine line between ribald and just plain classy.”




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46 replies

  1. I think that darkness and death is close to erotica… after all, it’s called “the little death” for a reason

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  2. Deliciously dark and alluring! 😀 Thank you so much for writing to the prompt, Lucy ❤️

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  3. I always liked the word phallus. I am a bit of a perv, but it also sounds so scientific and you can use it in ordinary life, and not everyone will get what the heck you are saying. They might just agree with you, and not have a clue you mean a male errmm.. extension. Having a bad day at work.. tell your boss to add some phallus to their diet – HAHAHA.

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    • There’s nothing wrong with that and I support this 100%. A few off the top of my head (HA):

      “Go phallus yourselves.”
      “Shove a phallus up there, would you?”
      “Shut your phallus.”
      “Tastes like… phallus, what do you think?”
      “Just add phallus to the soup. It’s an enriching ingredient with many nutrients.”

      I think I’m a bit of a perv too…

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  4. Amazing work Lucy! Good job! I love it! ❤

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  5. Autumnal death is what i think of the shape of your moon. As Bjorn said, it is a little bit like death.

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  6. This poem has me so excited for autumns leaves falling ✨✨

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  7. I can’t get past “the moon is phallus shaped”. For some reason it makes me think of autumn and phalling leaves! (Sorry, couldm’t resist!). Seriously, your poetry never fails to leave me mentally challenged, Lucy.

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    • Hahaha! Nice one, Beverly. I’m really glad you liked that line. I don’t believe I have ever used “phallus” in a poem before despite always wanting to, and thanks to the prompt, I can finally cross that one off my list.

      Thank you so much for your feedback. It means a lot!

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  8. I agree with Björn about the ‘petit mort’ and I love the phrase ‘throats of autumnal death’, Lucy.

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  9. Wow Lucy! You took my breath away is so few words. It was beautiful ☺️💕

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  10. The connection between love, sex and death is summed up so succinctly here – very powerful!

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  11. Gentle, well written. Good piece Lucy…

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  12. This leaves the mind open to possibilities.

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  13. You always produce such startling images.

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  14. “I kiss your hands”…is a line I found so stirring ❤
    It makes me think of Mr Thornton and Miss Hale

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  15. Ahh, Lucy. This caught my breath and made me sigh. You subtle take on the prompt is simply divine. 🙏

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  16. Excellent penning. I love it ❤ ❤ ❤

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  17. Fantastic concise piece Lucy. So like the overlay of images – the leaves and ‘falling to my hands’, both sexual and oddly sad at the same time.

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  18. Yes, the little death indeed, such powerful words, the brevity accentuates the passion.

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  19. Wickedly macabre and sensual. You have a seductive way with words.

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  20. Wow this is really well written!

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