leaves are falling.

the moon is
phallus-shaped
to split leaves—
are falling to my hands;
throats of autumnal death,
I kiss your hands.

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Written for the dVerse prompt: “What is your idea of an erotic poem? What makes it stimulating? In your own words describe the fine line between ribald and just plain classy.”


  46 comments for “leaves are falling.

  1. September 1, 2020 at 3:12 pm

    I think that darkness and death is close to erotica… after all, it’s called “the little death” for a reason

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    • September 1, 2020 at 3:13 pm

      Hahaha! Yes, that is true. La petite mort.

      Liked by 1 person

  2. sanaarizvi
    September 1, 2020 at 3:21 pm

    Deliciously dark and alluring! 😀 Thank you so much for writing to the prompt, Lucy ❤️

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    • September 1, 2020 at 4:40 pm

      Aww, thanks. I thank you for the amazing prompt today. Erotic poetry is a first for me, hahaha!

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      • sanaarizvi
        September 1, 2020 at 5:05 pm

        You’re most welcome! ❤️

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  3. September 1, 2020 at 3:23 pm

    I always liked the word phallus. I am a bit of a perv, but it also sounds so scientific and you can use it in ordinary life, and not everyone will get what the heck you are saying. They might just agree with you, and not have a clue you mean a male errmm.. extension. Having a bad day at work.. tell your boss to add some phallus to their diet – HAHAHA.

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    • September 1, 2020 at 4:50 pm

      There’s nothing wrong with that and I support this 100%. A few off the top of my head (HA):

      “Go phallus yourselves.”
      “Shove a phallus up there, would you?”
      “Shut your phallus.”
      “Tastes like… phallus, what do you think?”
      “Just add phallus to the soup. It’s an enriching ingredient with many nutrients.”

      I think I’m a bit of a perv too…

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  4. September 1, 2020 at 3:34 pm

    Amazing work Lucy! Good job! I love it! ❤

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  5. September 1, 2020 at 3:38 pm

    Autumnal death is what i think of the shape of your moon. As Bjorn said, it is a little bit like death.

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    • September 1, 2020 at 4:51 pm

      Thank you so much. ❤

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  6. September 1, 2020 at 3:56 pm

    This poem has me so excited for autumns leaves falling ✨✨

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    • September 1, 2020 at 4:51 pm

      I always love the autumn season too. It’s perfect.

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      • September 1, 2020 at 5:08 pm

        Absolutely, love the colours, fashion and nature feel ✨💫

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  7. Beverly Crawford
    September 1, 2020 at 4:04 pm

    I can’t get past “the moon is phallus shaped”. For some reason it makes me think of autumn and phalling leaves! (Sorry, couldm’t resist!). Seriously, your poetry never fails to leave me mentally challenged, Lucy.

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    • September 1, 2020 at 4:53 pm

      Hahaha! Nice one, Beverly. I’m really glad you liked that line. I don’t believe I have ever used “phallus” in a poem before despite always wanting to, and thanks to the prompt, I can finally cross that one off my list.

      Thank you so much for your feedback. It means a lot!

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  8. September 1, 2020 at 4:28 pm

    I agree with Björn about the ‘petit mort’ and I love the phrase ‘throats of autumnal death’, Lucy.

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    • September 1, 2020 at 4:53 pm

      Thank you, Kim. So glad you enjoyed this piece. ❤

      Liked by 1 person

  9. September 1, 2020 at 9:17 pm

    Wow Lucy! You took my breath away is so few words. It was beautiful ☺️💕

    Liked by 2 people

  10. September 1, 2020 at 10:30 pm

    Very nicely done Lucy!

    Liked by 1 person

  11. September 2, 2020 at 4:14 am

    The connection between love, sex and death is summed up so succinctly here – very powerful!

    Liked by 1 person

  12. September 2, 2020 at 2:14 pm

    Gentle, well written. Good piece Lucy…

    Liked by 1 person

    • September 2, 2020 at 2:39 pm

      Thank you, Rob!

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  13. September 2, 2020 at 4:02 pm

    This leaves the mind open to possibilities.

    Liked by 1 person

  14. September 2, 2020 at 4:11 pm

    You always produce such startling images.

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    • September 2, 2020 at 5:07 pm

      I feel honored to hear that. Thank you so much. ❤ ❤

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  15. September 2, 2020 at 4:47 pm

    “I kiss your hands”…is a line I found so stirring ❤
    It makes me think of Mr Thornton and Miss Hale

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    • September 2, 2020 at 5:10 pm

      Thank you so much. ❤ ❤ I’m biased to that line admittedly, especially with this piece being an erotic poem, I had to add some display of intimacy. I’m glad you enjoyed it!

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  16. September 2, 2020 at 5:05 pm

    Ahh, Lucy. This caught my breath and made me sigh. You subtle take on the prompt is simply divine. 🙏

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    • September 2, 2020 at 5:10 pm

      Oh, I thank you so much. I’m glad you think that and could enjoy my piece. ❤

      Liked by 1 person

  17. September 2, 2020 at 5:08 pm

    Excellent penning. I love it ❤ ❤ ❤

    Liked by 1 person

  18. September 2, 2020 at 9:49 pm

    Fantastic concise piece Lucy. So like the overlay of images – the leaves and ‘falling to my hands’, both sexual and oddly sad at the same time.

    Liked by 1 person

    • September 2, 2020 at 11:13 pm

      Thank you, Peter. I was really hoping to communicate those themes of sadness and sex, and I’m glad it could be conveyed in this piece. Thank you for your feedback! 😀

      Liked by 1 person

  19. September 2, 2020 at 11:04 pm

    Yes, the little death indeed, such powerful words, the brevity accentuates the passion.

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  20. September 3, 2020 at 8:30 pm

    Wickedly macabre and sensual. You have a seductive way with words.

    Liked by 1 person

  21. September 4, 2020 at 12:45 am

    Wow this is really well written!

    Liked by 1 person

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