blackest feather.

the blackest feather

in the sky chokes

delirium to the stars;

our bodies glaze white under the willows,

and water sat her mistress

of spindrift wombs, the sun

fed the death tree; give our bones

the wispy velvet vein

of our blood,

becoming mother.

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Written for the dVerse prompt: “Show us your skywriting by penning a poem of exactly 44 words, including some semblance of the word sky.”


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  57 comments for “blackest feather.

  1. September 21, 2020 at 3:26 pm

    This is so ominous… that image of the feather makes me think of carnivore raptors keen in consuming the flesh of our bodies, pale under the trees.

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    • September 21, 2020 at 4:56 pm

      Truly, that was exactly the imagery that popped into my head as I was writing the line, “our bodies glaze white under the willows…” Thank you so much for your feedback. It’s always appreciated.

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  2. sanaarizvi
    September 21, 2020 at 3:29 pm

    This is incredibly dark and thought-provoking!

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    • September 21, 2020 at 4:56 pm

      Thank you dearly, Sanaa.

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  3. September 21, 2020 at 3:31 pm

    Such gorgeous dark images here, Lucy. Just lovely.

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    • September 21, 2020 at 4:57 pm

      Thank you, De, both for your lovely words and the wonderful prompt today.

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  4. September 21, 2020 at 3:41 pm

    This is very dark but velvety rich with haunting imagery – excellent quadrille, Lucy!

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  5. September 21, 2020 at 3:46 pm

    Oh you do go to the dark side, Lucy!

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    • September 21, 2020 at 4:59 pm

      I beg the question: When do I not? 😉

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  6. September 21, 2020 at 3:49 pm

    Beautifully rich and dark, these lines resonate deeply

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    • September 21, 2020 at 5:00 pm

      Oh, I thank you so very much Hannah. ❤ Your feedback and support has meant a lot to me. Thank you.

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      • September 22, 2020 at 3:21 am

        You’re most welcome, you deserve it all as you are truly talented and inspiring 💕

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      • September 22, 2020 at 4:44 pm

        ❤ ❤ ❤ ❤

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  7. September 21, 2020 at 4:04 pm

    I’m imagining the wispy velvet vein as a root, linking our bones to soil. Mysterious and deep, Lucy.

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  8. September 21, 2020 at 4:05 pm

    I stick with the first image and fly with it. The rest is the reflection.

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  9. September 21, 2020 at 4:11 pm

    That sky sounds ominous, and the rust and blood, unsettling. Dark, but full of vivid images, Lucy.

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  10. September 21, 2020 at 4:17 pm

    A beautifully dark quadrille, Lucy. My favourite colour is black and, if I had been born several decades later, I would have been a goth. The opening lines are perfect, they could stand on their own – as Jane says, the rest is reflection, but what reflection! I love the spindrift wombs.

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  11. September 21, 2020 at 5:09 pm

    I can well understand where this prompt took you, it is a reflection of our times

    Still wishing you a happy Monday. Thanks for dropping by to read mine

    Much💜love

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    • September 21, 2020 at 5:56 pm

      Thank you, Gillena. Much love back. ❤ ❤

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  12. September 21, 2020 at 5:18 pm

    Hi Lucy! This is something I need to share with my fellow writers here at dVerse. I so enjoy reading the work that you create and post, and am genuinely honored to be embraced as a part of this community of poets. May we all find healing in these challenging times. And as a true aquarian love child, and also a proud flower child of the 60’s, who truly believed then we would some day change the world to be a better place for all, and still believes that we might yet do it — I wish each of you peace, health, and love. Write on!

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    • September 21, 2020 at 5:58 pm

      Thank you, Rob. I’m still kind of new to the dVerse community and I find it to be so refreshing and wonderful to be part of it as well. I wish you peace, health, and love back. There will be better days in our times ahead, we just have to watch carefully for them, but they will indeed come.

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      • September 21, 2020 at 6:06 pm

        Also, this was a moving piece that you wrote today. 🙂

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      • September 21, 2020 at 6:27 pm

        Thank you! ❤

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  13. September 21, 2020 at 5:29 pm

    Lovely twisting and turning in this piece. For some reason I found a shard of light in that last line.

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    • September 21, 2020 at 5:59 pm

      Peter, thank you so much. I really intended this piece to be more uplifting and light than what I generally write about, so I’m ecstatic you can see my intent with the ending.

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  14. Lia
    September 21, 2020 at 6:00 pm

    Wow Lucy, this is lovely!

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  15. September 21, 2020 at 7:48 pm

    Absolutely beautiful imagery Lucy!! I love it 🖤

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  16. September 21, 2020 at 8:13 pm

    Dark theme as usual Lucy but I find the last line, becoming mother, hopeful, a resurrection from death.

    Your word smithing is divine here:
    spindrift wombs, the sun
    fed the death tree

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    • September 21, 2020 at 8:52 pm

      Thank you so much, Grace. And yes, with the final line, I really intended it to be hopeful.

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  17. September 21, 2020 at 11:29 pm

    Black is certainly dark but blood is both life and death.

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  18. September 22, 2020 at 1:40 am

    Loved the imagery in this!

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    • September 22, 2020 at 2:01 am

      I’m so glad. ❤️

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  19. September 22, 2020 at 2:08 am

    Wonderfully weaved. Marvelous words for jumpstarting my day…

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    • September 22, 2020 at 4:33 pm

      I thank you so much. You’ve made my day with your kind words. ❤

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      • September 23, 2020 at 1:54 am

        Likewise. Your words possess the power to energize the day. Thank you. ❤

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      • September 23, 2020 at 2:14 am

        ❤ ❤

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  20. September 22, 2020 at 2:17 am

    Wow! These lines paint a very vivid & dark picture 💚 beautiful poem!

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  21. September 22, 2020 at 2:25 am

    kaykuala
    the sun fed the death tree;
    give our bones
    the wispy velvet vein
    of our blood,

    Hauntingly on the dark side Lucy but beautiful write

    Hank

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    • September 22, 2020 at 4:33 pm

      Thank you so, so much Hank.

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  22. September 22, 2020 at 10:13 am

    Oh we are all so linked together aren’t we? The elements, the earth, humans, animals. This was amazing Lucy. I think its my favorite so far 🥰

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  23. September 22, 2020 at 5:34 pm

    Ominous sky. And yet, death is part of life. (K)

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    • September 22, 2020 at 6:22 pm

      It really is. Thank you for your feedback.

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  24. September 22, 2020 at 7:49 pm

    Terrifying use of maternal imagery.

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  25. October 26, 2020 at 11:13 am

    Nice poem!

    Liked by 1 person

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