blackest feather.

the blackest feather

in the sky chokes

delirium to the stars;

our bodies glaze white under the willows,

and water sat her mistress

of spindrift wombs, the sun

fed the death tree; give our bones

the wispy velvet vein

of our blood,

becoming mother.

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Written for the dVerse prompt: “Show us your skywriting by penning a poem of exactly 44 words, including some semblance of the word sky.”




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  1. This is so ominous… that image of the feather makes me think of carnivore raptors keen in consuming the flesh of our bodies, pale under the trees.

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    • Truly, that was exactly the imagery that popped into my head as I was writing the line, “our bodies glaze white under the willows…” Thank you so much for your feedback. It’s always appreciated.

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  2. This is incredibly dark and thought-provoking!

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  3. Such gorgeous dark images here, Lucy. Just lovely.

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  4. This is very dark but velvety rich with haunting imagery – excellent quadrille, Lucy!

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  5. Oh you do go to the dark side, Lucy!

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  6. Beautifully rich and dark, these lines resonate deeply

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  7. I’m imagining the wispy velvet vein as a root, linking our bones to soil. Mysterious and deep, Lucy.

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  8. I stick with the first image and fly with it. The rest is the reflection.

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  9. That sky sounds ominous, and the rust and blood, unsettling. Dark, but full of vivid images, Lucy.

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  10. A beautifully dark quadrille, Lucy. My favourite colour is black and, if I had been born several decades later, I would have been a goth. The opening lines are perfect, they could stand on their own – as Jane says, the rest is reflection, but what reflection! I love the spindrift wombs.

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  11. I can well understand where this prompt took you, it is a reflection of our times

    Still wishing you a happy Monday. Thanks for dropping by to read mine

    Much💜love

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  12. Hi Lucy! This is something I need to share with my fellow writers here at dVerse. I so enjoy reading the work that you create and post, and am genuinely honored to be embraced as a part of this community of poets. May we all find healing in these challenging times. And as a true aquarian love child, and also a proud flower child of the 60’s, who truly believed then we would some day change the world to be a better place for all, and still believes that we might yet do it — I wish each of you peace, health, and love. Write on!

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  13. Lovely twisting and turning in this piece. For some reason I found a shard of light in that last line.

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  14. Wow Lucy, this is lovely!

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  15. Absolutely beautiful imagery Lucy!! I love it 🖤

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  16. Dark theme as usual Lucy but I find the last line, becoming mother, hopeful, a resurrection from death.

    Your word smithing is divine here:
    spindrift wombs, the sun
    fed the death tree

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  17. Black is certainly dark but blood is both life and death.

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  18. Wonderfully weaved. Marvelous words for jumpstarting my day…

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  19. Wow! These lines paint a very vivid & dark picture 💚 beautiful poem!

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  20. kaykuala
    the sun fed the death tree;
    give our bones
    the wispy velvet vein
    of our blood,

    Hauntingly on the dark side Lucy but beautiful write

    Hank

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  21. Oh we are all so linked together aren’t we? The elements, the earth, humans, animals. This was amazing Lucy. I think its my favorite so far 🥰

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  22. Ominous sky. And yet, death is part of life. (K)

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  23. Terrifying use of maternal imagery.

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