blanket me.

Disturbs alone / a knot of darkness
in the bridle and umbrage
blanketing the red koi leaves of grass / the ambrosiac death
naked in a dance / under the moon; heart whittled / a sea sings the backbone and root of grief
remembering once the mantric lights.


Written for the dVerse prompt: Use blanket as a noun, adjective, or verb. Describe a blanket, real or imagined. Make a blanket statement. Be cozy, dark, sensual, or funny. Maybe you want to blanket us with sunshine or warmth or blanket us under snow. Your choice, as long as your poem is 44 words.


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  51 comments for “blanket me.

  1. October 5, 2020 at 3:43 pm

    To me there is a death wish in this poem Lucy… the ambrosiac death, dancing makes me long for such a moment, but then in then you turn it into grief which really makes it ambivalent

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    • October 5, 2020 at 7:33 pm

      I can see those parallels about a death wish. I combine both aspects–grief and desire, I think. Thank you so much for your feedback. It’s always appreciated. 🙂

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  2. October 5, 2020 at 4:17 pm

    I love the “heart whittled” imagery. I may have to try this word prompt. Good one!

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  3. October 5, 2020 at 4:28 pm

    I love that in among the darkness and ‘ambrosiac death’ there is rich colour in the ‘red koi leaves of grass’, Ingrid. I also love the bleakness of the lines, ‘heart whittled / a sea sings the backbone and root of grief’.

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  4. October 5, 2020 at 4:29 pm

    Lovely imagery. Part of it seems like it could be the dying of the seasons. I like sea singing and mourning.

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    • October 5, 2020 at 7:31 pm

      Thank you so much. I definitely had that thought in mind.

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  5. October 5, 2020 at 4:50 pm

    I like the red koi leaves of grass, a very striking and original image.

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  6. October 5, 2020 at 5:04 pm

    Always challenging out-there writing Lucy. ‘remembering once the mantric lights’ – is the memorable line – for me evokes a dark sea and far off the city’s lights reflected in the troubled waters.

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    • October 5, 2020 at 7:31 pm

      Thank you, Peter. 🙂

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  7. October 5, 2020 at 5:12 pm

    I get an image here of cold dark water and decomposing leaves floating on the surface. Things really shut down for the season…

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    • October 5, 2020 at 7:30 pm

      You would be right. Thank you so much, as always, Lisa. ❤

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  8. sanaarizvi
    October 5, 2020 at 5:44 pm

    Gorgeously evocative! I love; “a sea sings the backbone and root of grief.” 🙂

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    • October 5, 2020 at 7:30 pm

      Thank you, Sanaa.

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  9. October 5, 2020 at 6:46 pm

    I hope the blanket warms your soul….

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  10. October 5, 2020 at 6:46 pm

    I hope the blanket warms your soul….

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  11. October 5, 2020 at 7:13 pm

    I specially love this part: a sea sings the backbone and root of grief

    The voice cries out in solitude, in deep reflection.

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    • October 5, 2020 at 7:22 pm

      Thank you, Grace. 🙂

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  12. October 5, 2020 at 8:12 pm

    kaykuala
    Classic poetic language, Lucy! You are blessed with such talents well shown in all of your previous postings! Great!

    Hank

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    • October 5, 2020 at 8:21 pm

      Hank, I thank you so much. It’s an honor!

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  13. October 5, 2020 at 8:28 pm

    Lucy, I’m awed by these phrases, “abrosiac death,” “mantric lights”: the desire and compulsion driving the persona into a “knot of darkness” is powerfully executed in your imagery. Amazing.

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  14. October 5, 2020 at 9:33 pm

    BEAUTIFUL LUCY! lOVE IT! XO

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    • October 6, 2020 at 10:24 am

      Thank you so much!

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  15. October 5, 2020 at 9:34 pm

    “the ambrosiac death
    naked in a dance”

    This makes me think of a Bacchanalia taken to the ultimate excess.

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    • October 6, 2020 at 10:25 am

      Intriguing comparison! Thank you for your feedback.

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  16. KK
    October 5, 2020 at 11:02 pm

    A very beautiful and powerful poem. I liked the words you used.

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  17. October 5, 2020 at 11:57 pm

    Luv your imaging of the season changes
    Happy Monday

    Much💖love

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    • October 6, 2020 at 10:26 am

      I’m happy to hear that! Thank you.

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  18. October 6, 2020 at 12:59 am

    Sick flow & crazy imagery….what not to like….

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  19. October 6, 2020 at 2:34 am

    Lucy this is brilliant. What a great read!

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    • October 6, 2020 at 10:27 am

      Thank you, Rob!

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  20. October 6, 2020 at 2:51 am

    ‘the ambrosiac death’ – what a haunting image: something seductive about death in a cold season perhaps.

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  21. October 6, 2020 at 10:08 am

    goldfish leaves of autumn, grief and dancing under the moon. Lots of swirling images.

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  22. October 6, 2020 at 7:23 pm

    that knot of darkness can bind us (K)

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    • October 6, 2020 at 11:55 pm

      Indeed, it can. Thank you for the feedback.

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  23. October 6, 2020 at 10:58 pm

    Everyone has said it all so I shall add that I love the imagery your words evoked. Beautiful.

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    • October 6, 2020 at 11:54 pm

      Thank you so much. 🙂

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  24. October 7, 2020 at 1:25 pm

    Lucy,
    I love, “heart whittled” It is a clever way to describe the pain.
    Thanks for sharing your words.

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  25. October 8, 2020 at 8:53 pm

    “ambrosiac death” stabbed at me. Sometimes you can feel or imagine how sweet death could be. Only my opinion, of course. Fabulous poem, Lucy!

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    • October 8, 2020 at 9:12 pm

      That is indeed true, at times. Thank you so much! 🙂

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