81 comments for “I left.

  1. June 15, 2020 at 7:41 am

    This poem is a wonderful exercise in ‘less is more’. (taking notes, 😉 Shared it here..

    https://grumpysgiftspoetry.org/2020/06/15/i-left-lucy-of-lucys-works/

    Thanks for being generous.

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    • June 15, 2020 at 10:56 am

      Aww, thank you so much. ❤️❤️

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  2. June 15, 2020 at 2:26 pm

    Absolutely gorgeous

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  3. Rhen Laird
    June 15, 2020 at 3:57 pm

    Wow, deep and rich.

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  4. June 16, 2020 at 3:00 pm

    Reblogged this on By the Mighty Mumford and commented:

    WELL-DONE!

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  5. June 16, 2020 at 3:50 pm

    The line structure and pace really hold things together well here!

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  6. June 16, 2020 at 10:01 pm

    Beautiful and powerful poem. The last line, coupled with the previous line of the tree reminds me of that phrase, “When the bough breaks, the cradle will fall.”

    …reminding me of what I am currently writing, of a character who is finding his love to be alike a dead rose, though still keeping a rather sharp thorn on its stem. It’s like he uses pain to somehow raise what can no longer be raised, because it is the only thing that resembles what once was. The feelings… still there.

    You have good work. An interesting style, too. 🙂

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  7. June 17, 2020 at 2:51 am

    Deep and meaningful! Great poem.

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  8. June 19, 2020 at 3:53 pm

    Oo, love how short and long this seems at the same time, and the imagery of ‘father’s ankle’.

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    • June 19, 2020 at 4:17 pm

      Thank you so much. I am so happy you enjoyed this piece!

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  9. June 19, 2020 at 11:22 pm

    Wow,simple but a beautiful poem.

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  10. June 23, 2020 at 12:51 am

    When I want to read great poetry, I come to Lucy’s blog. 🙂 Well penned, Lucy! I love your turn of a word and fantastic imagery!

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    • June 23, 2020 at 1:11 am

      Oh, wow. Thank you so much, Jason, for the lovely comment. That brings me such joy to hear that. Thank you!

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  11. June 24, 2020 at 9:04 am

    Really beautiful!

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  12. July 5, 2020 at 9:24 am

    ❤️

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  13. October 15, 2020 at 3:14 pm

    The title, I left and the ending with I fell, tells of deep emotional pain. The leaving of one’s senses and body upon a tragedy is amplified with few line structure. Waves of mourning is deeper than this.

    Lucy, thanks for sharing this in OLN.

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    • October 15, 2020 at 7:05 pm

      Thank you so much, Grace!

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  14. October 15, 2020 at 3:15 pm

    BEautiful and graceful at the same time.

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  15. October 15, 2020 at 3:28 pm

    Leaving and falling, this is so laden with sorrow, I feel like a leaf heavy with rain from your words.

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    • October 15, 2020 at 7:06 pm

      Thank you, Bjorn.

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  16. October 15, 2020 at 3:28 pm

    This poem is a whole story of heartbreak in few words, Lucy, sandwiched between two two-word sentences ‘I left’ and ‘I fell’. I like the phrases ‘velveteen legs of the sea’ and ‘a withering of loneliness’.

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    • October 15, 2020 at 7:06 pm

      Kim, thank you. I’m so glad you enjoyed this piece. ❤

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  17. October 15, 2020 at 3:38 pm

    I love the power in the simple words you use here. It’s pared down to the bone.

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    • October 15, 2020 at 7:06 pm

      Thank you, Sarah.

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  18. Glenn A. Buttkus
    October 15, 2020 at 3:54 pm

    Yes, this piece is Hemingway-sparse, no extra clutter. I always find a second poem between your lines–a tale of a father/daughter tango, perhaps an unreachable Dad, distant, stoic, and death makes an appearance, a calculated cameo, and a tree is like a relationship, or the lack of it–nature vs. nurture.

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    • October 15, 2020 at 7:08 pm

      Glenn, you hit the theme right on the head. Fortunately, this poem does not come from personal experience. My dad is my hero. But, I can empathize with others who have known or know that pain. Thank you so much for the comment.

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  19. October 15, 2020 at 3:57 pm

    Evocative and powerful story in its brevity and simplicity!! Great word artistry, Lucy!

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  20. sanaarizvi
    October 15, 2020 at 4:09 pm

    This is incredibly poignant! For me, leaving and falling speaks of deep emotional ache. The human heart has to endure so much… sigh … 😦

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    • October 15, 2020 at 7:09 pm

      Sanaa, thank you. ❤

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  21. October 15, 2020 at 4:58 pm

    I love the starkness of the images here, punctuated by the strength of the last line. (K)

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  22. October 15, 2020 at 5:44 pm

    Not sure what the mystery is but the intensity then the letting go brings relief.

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    • October 15, 2020 at 7:10 pm

      Not much mystery here, I admit, but I’m glad you can see the partial closure in the ending line. Thank you so much. 🙂

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  23. October 15, 2020 at 6:02 pm

    Lovely poem.

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  24. October 15, 2020 at 7:48 pm

    kaykuala

    a withering of loneliness
    I mourn in the tree

    Love this Lucy! Pondering in the poignant moments of stillness often gives us all the inspiration even amidst sadness!

    Hank

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    • October 15, 2020 at 8:01 pm

      Thank you so much.

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  25. October 15, 2020 at 9:43 pm

    “I mourn in the tree, I fell.” Interesting lines that make me think of the family tree, since we see the father mentioned earlier. Trees always bring to mind such innocence and protection to me, I think that’s a good place to end here.

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    • October 15, 2020 at 10:51 pm

      Yes, that is exactly what I had in mind when writing. Thank you so very much. ❤

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  26. October 15, 2020 at 9:58 pm

    A great poem of leaving, Lucy, So many are leaving us all alone! So very sad.

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    • October 15, 2020 at 10:51 pm

      Thank you. It truly is sad.

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  27. October 15, 2020 at 10:49 pm

    simply amazing and beautiful friend thanks for sharing!

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    • October 15, 2020 at 10:52 pm

      Thank you so much, MB. 😊

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  28. October 15, 2020 at 11:17 pm

    A complete story in so few words creates beauty. The sorrow of I Left grabs at my heart. I especially was drawn to these words, “velveteen legs of the sea.”
    Thank you.

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  29. October 15, 2020 at 11:52 pm

    Lots here Lucy – in such a compressed form too – the ‘velveteen legs’ is a fantastic image – and the ‘father’s ankle’ – I imagine cold and blue (and oddly in slippers) – and the leaving and the mourning – spare and poignant – made more so by your fantastic playing. The complete lyric here.

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    • October 16, 2020 at 3:21 am

      Thank you so much and beyond. ❤️❤️ So glad you enjoyed both the piece and my composition.

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  30. October 16, 2020 at 12:09 am

    “in velveteen legs

    of the sea”

    That is such a wonderful imagery. ❤️

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  31. October 16, 2020 at 5:16 am

    💕 Beautiful! Loved it, Lucy!

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  32. October 16, 2020 at 1:20 pm

    I played your instrumental before reading your poem, but then I reread the words aloud several times with the music, varying the pace until I felt it fit the pace of the music. It definitely magnified the impact of severance I found in the poem.

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  33. October 16, 2020 at 6:23 pm

    A lovely share.

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  34. October 16, 2020 at 7:11 pm

    Mysterious. The compression hints at so many things. A poem to savour and re-read.

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  35. October 17, 2020 at 10:35 pm

    This made my heart sink. The last line is as unexpected as death can be….or the loss of love. So beautifully expressed, Lucy.

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    • October 17, 2020 at 10:37 pm

      Thank you, Mish. ❤

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    • December 30, 2020 at 10:14 pm

      Thank you so very much. I’m very happy to hear that you could enjoy “I Left” especially with the current circumstances of the world. Thank you. ❤

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