Subjugate.

Oktavia stood against the light. Nightingale hums simulated the room, a shape of blood lotus forming out from her palms with a pop. There is nothing behind the wall except a space where the wind whistles, and the dead body of an engineer.

Her father.

Oktavia inhibited Elizabet by pulling her close, the depth of her scent inhaled like a coiling python ready to eat their prey. Her eyes, draping ice.

A wave formed between them, a struggling fear in the human. “You’re going to kill me.”

“I’m sorry, my dear.” Eyes sharp, a mixture of her cold features bore itself into her skull.

The bionic pressed down on her netrusion chip.

“What are you doing?”

“I am shutting down. Goodbye, Elizabet.”

“Wait—wait, please, there’s—”

“You did what I asked. Now we’re free.”

The hovercraft, which they were in, crashed.


Written for the dVerse prompt: Write a piece of flash fiction or other prose (not a poem) of up to or exactly 144 words, including the given line,

“there is nothing behind the wall
except a space where the wind whistles”
from “Drawings By Children” by Lisel Mueller.

The ending was not intended to be ironic or initially funny (even though, I laughed so hard when writing it). I had these characters created for awhile, actually, and I just needed to put them in some situation. Might run off with this idea with space-travel and wormholes, I don’t know. My NaNoWriMo goal is already a failure. 😀


  43 comments for “Subjugate.

  1. November 9, 2020 at 6:04 pm

    I might have laughed, too–be careful what you ask for, although I first read inhibited as inhabited Elizabet, which made me think first she was a demon.
    I’m also thinking of Hal singing “Daisy, Daisy.” 😀

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    • November 9, 2020 at 6:31 pm

      Hahaha. Okta is not so far from that description. I thank you so much for your thoughts and feedback. It’s always appreciated. 😀

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  2. sanaarizvi
    November 9, 2020 at 7:22 pm

    Such powerful imagery in this one especially; “the depth of her scent inhaled like a coiling python ready to eat their prey. Her eyes, draping ice.” Very Novemberish, Lucy! 💝💝

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    • November 9, 2020 at 7:23 pm

      Thank you so much, Sanaa, for your lovely words. ❤ ❤

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  3. Glenn A. Buttkus
    November 9, 2020 at 7:24 pm

    I read “inhabited” too. This is grand Flash Fiction, Lucy; straight up wonderful. You tell a lot of story with dialogue and limited exposition, and this contrasts well to your “normal” dark poetry style.

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    • November 9, 2020 at 7:54 pm

      Thank you so, so much, Glenn. I always make my writing style different with fiction; I still indulge in those dark themes but it is more direct and up front in contrast to my poetry and prose-poetry.

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  4. November 9, 2020 at 7:27 pm

    There’s more than one way to be free, this way being the darkest and I never saw it coming. Well told tale, Lucy, all the more because you leave us wanting more of the backstory.

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    • November 9, 2020 at 7:56 pm

      Thank you so much, Dora. I’m also glad that you didn’t see it coming–I was a bit nervous about if the ending would fall flat or if it were predictable.

      As for backstory, I have it for the most part but I’m still piecing it together.

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      • November 9, 2020 at 8:29 pm

        Awesome! I hope your fans will get a chance to read it soon. This is such an intriguing sci-fi plot! 😍

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  5. November 9, 2020 at 7:33 pm

    Wonderful dark mystery here Lucy. Ominous, threatening, and fantastic!

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    • November 9, 2020 at 7:56 pm

      Thank you very much, Rob!

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  6. November 9, 2020 at 8:11 pm

    It is amazing how thoughts and inspiration wait around for just the right time to be written! Your sci-fi drama sounds like it could be resurrected and continued further!

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  7. November 9, 2020 at 8:27 pm

    All’s well that ends well, which this didn’t. Interesting triangle going on there.

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  8. November 9, 2020 at 10:39 pm

    I saw inhabited too. I like the idea of crossing over, or is it between? (K)

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  9. November 9, 2020 at 11:30 pm

    I love your opening and how we get mystery right away with the dead body of an engineer! This is a great piece, you should definitely write more science fiction!

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    • November 9, 2020 at 11:47 pm

      Thank you, Tricia, so much. ❤ ❤ I will definitely do that!

      Liked by 1 person

  10. November 10, 2020 at 12:09 am

    I’m guessing at each turn of this writhing python tale – action from the outset, lots of unanswered questions, twist after twist and the terrific denouement – the true story-teller at work.

    Liked by 1 person

    • November 10, 2020 at 1:08 am

      Peter, that means so much to me. I am so glad you think that! ❤ ❤ Thank you very much.

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  11. November 10, 2020 at 1:50 am

    When A.I.s turn bad…there’s dark horror here, told almost matter-of-factly – love it!

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  12. November 10, 2020 at 1:53 am

    And so tomorrow crashes and burns.

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    • November 10, 2020 at 2:29 am

      Oh, yes, it does.

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  13. silent poetry
    November 10, 2020 at 4:59 am

    Real story teller Lucy…. Great work, love it’s darkness. Very cool read ❤️❤️

    Liked by 1 person

    • November 10, 2020 at 8:14 am

      Thank you. 😊

      Like

  14. November 10, 2020 at 5:26 am

    I agree with Glenn, Lucy, a lot of story with dialogue and limited exposition, which contrasts with your poetry style. I love the mix of Gothic and sci-fi (Sci-Goth?) and the surprises: the ‘shape of blood lotus forming out from her palms with a pop’ and the crashing hovercraft.

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  15. November 10, 2020 at 8:26 am

    “Wait—wait, please, there’s—”

    This phrase sticks out. There is an untold story exposed by the staccato reactions. Clever mystery played out Lucy!

    Hank

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    • November 10, 2020 at 8:28 am

      There actually is an untold story. 🙂 Thank you so much for your feedback, Hank.

      Like

  16. November 10, 2020 at 8:48 am

    Lots of blood and venom, then, poof! They’re gone. As others have said, I wonder who they are and why.

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  17. November 10, 2020 at 10:26 am

    A great bit of storytelling, Lucy. Enjoyed reading it.

    Liked by 1 person

    • November 10, 2020 at 11:09 am

      Thank you, Misky!

      Like

  18. November 10, 2020 at 2:26 pm

    Nice science fiction. There was one misstep. ‘…in which they were in…’ is redundant. I would be better with only one in

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    • November 10, 2020 at 2:27 pm

      Thank you, Larry, for the feedback. That is a good point and I agree with you on that. It does seem redundant.

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  19. November 10, 2020 at 3:53 pm

    I love how you surprised me with the body of the engineer, her father first… then I wondered and ended up in something more sci-fi. You made me think of a cross-over between Kill Bill and Matrix here.

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    • November 10, 2020 at 4:04 pm

      Thank you so much. I am glad it came as a surprise to you, and I am especially grateful for your feedback and compliment. Thank you. ❤

      Like

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