in one key.

flower-envying
the day of the sea
for dance of tragedy in one key

bleeds, the root
and laz crawls like a dandelion.

shame, shame of the garden
born naked; wastrel-limbs
crawl rain,
winter of pearl sinking
feet

poisoning again
a body
breaking their wisps
and bones, come leaf,

god forbid if I meant it,
lies the stone where i look
through dooms of stars
and fragility of love

I give this womb an air
over the grave for you and I
above.

“So close that your sea rises with my heat” C.Perez ~ Love in a Time of Climate Change

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Written for the dVerse prompt: Choose ONE line and write your poem as continuation where the poet left off, thematically, in the same mood, rather than literally. Give special thought to your own final lines.


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  28 comments for “in one key.

  1. January 26, 2021 at 4:25 pm

    This is vividly chilling Lucy… standing naked in a frosty winter garden…
    “shame, shame of the garden
    born naked; wastrel-limbs
    crawl rain,
    winter of pearl sinking
    feet”

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    • January 26, 2021 at 4:53 pm

      Oh, I thank you so much Ivor! That is honestly my favorite stanza in this piece, which makes me happy that you enjoyed that one too. ❤

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  2. January 26, 2021 at 4:26 pm

    I think we never really know how close we are to the grave… we might feel it sometimes like the damp breath of dusk, or catch the scent of the grave in passing… but maybe we have to ignore the abyss if want to keep walking,

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    • January 26, 2021 at 4:53 pm

      That is definitely true! Thank you for your feedback. ❤ ❤

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  3. January 26, 2021 at 4:51 pm

    This poem howls in anguish.

    Liked by 2 people

    • January 26, 2021 at 4:53 pm

      I agree with you there. 🙂

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  4. sanaarizvi
    January 26, 2021 at 4:55 pm

    Wow! This is deliciously dark and chilling, Lucy! Especially love; “god forbid if I meant it, lies the stone where i look through dooms of stars and fragility of love.” 💝💝

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    • January 26, 2021 at 7:27 pm

      Thank you greatly, Sanaa!

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  5. January 26, 2021 at 5:00 pm

    So dark and chilling. You are the expert at that, Lucy. No doubt about it! Wow!

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    • January 26, 2021 at 7:28 pm

      I’m glad I could clear up that doubt. 😉

      Thank you so much!

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  6. January 26, 2021 at 5:19 pm

    Beautiful

    Liked by 2 people

  7. January 26, 2021 at 6:34 pm

    lies the stone where i look
    through dooms of stars
    and fragility of love

    This passage is so splendid Lucy. Dark piece overall, but fascinating to read, as usual.

    Liked by 2 people

    • January 26, 2021 at 7:28 pm

      Thank you so much, Rob! I always appreciate your comments. ❤

      Like

  8. January 26, 2021 at 11:27 pm

    A very interesting and sad love poem. I see we were kindred spirits in our poem choice today! :>)

    Liked by 2 people

    • January 26, 2021 at 11:34 pm

      Thank you so much!

      And yes, kindred spirits indeed! It’s a wonderful quote.

      Liked by 1 person

  9. January 27, 2021 at 12:53 am

    The subtle play between birth and death, the womb and the grave, come through very strongly in this piece, which was a fine way to follow the lines from Perez.

    Liked by 2 people

  10. January 27, 2021 at 2:39 am

    wastrel-limbs
    crawl rain,

    Wow… such an eerie poem…

    -David

    Liked by 2 people

  11. January 27, 2021 at 4:39 am

    I love the way you’ve riffed on the Perez line, Lucy, the ‘dance of tragedy in one key’ and the story of Eve’s shame or curse.

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  12. January 27, 2021 at 3:54 pm

    I always look forward to reading your poems, and this one didn’t disappoint!

    Liked by 2 people

    • January 27, 2021 at 7:27 pm

      Oh wow, I am so ecstatic to hear that. Thank you!

      Liked by 1 person

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