black coat / I see death / in the moon /

and hawks nest / one worm / New York

drinks the flowers, I could imagine,

if I ever had a dream

it was not like this / bone split open and blooms /


it’s the snow, it’s the / cold / two fingers

on the stone before it’s placed on

half a year / later / makes the Earth

in flaming petals / to move its skeleton

on the rock / phantoms get drunk,

and hide to the blue shoreline

like some kind of war / where no man dies /

I count the bones / and recall a garden /

and recall / a glass figurine I broke /

on mother’s dresser / I go into the blue lupines,

and birdfoots / I leave orange petals

to go dying / to drown / the sunset


the cemetery is red

I kill / the time / the winter

is soon / and frost in early morning

is dead / but you’re roofed

in the coffin / as the stone

hides your ghosts;

I tug the black coat. I see death in the moon

begin to rise like moccasins.

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  36 comments for “ii.

  1. August 7, 2020 at 6:50 am

    phenomenal Lucy! xo

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  2. August 7, 2020 at 7:02 am

    Sensational 👍

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  3. August 7, 2020 at 7:09 am

    Hi Lucy.. I’ve read your piece twice… maybe It’s me, because I’ve had an anxiety attack today, but I’m interpreting your words as a pandemic poem of suffering ang gloom, and with a harsh winter looming…. Maybe I’m seeing your words as representing myself today…. don’t worry… I’m tired, It’s time to give myself a rest…

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    • August 7, 2020 at 8:02 am

      Hope you’re doing okay now, Ivor. I’m so sorry about the anxiety attack. The pandemic has caused an awful lot of anxiety and the best thing I agree with is to get some rest. Hang in there. 💕

      As for the poem, I didn’t really have the pandemic in mind, though that’s left to the reader to interpret their own way, the intent of the piece. I kept thinking back to harsh winters representing grief or death, but I think this can definitely apply to the pandemic as well with those thoughts and feelings of abandon.


      • August 7, 2020 at 8:13 am

        I’m in bed resting., haha I’m pleased my interpretation was reasonably close… 😊

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  4. August 7, 2020 at 10:26 am

    I always like the words you put in your poems… Well done again! ❤

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  5. August 7, 2020 at 3:31 pm


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  6. August 7, 2020 at 3:35 pm

    This poem stuck with me after I finished it. Never before have I read of the moon and moccasins together, so I love those potent ending lines: “I tug the black coat. I see death in the moon/ begin to rise like moccasins.”

    Makes me think of delicate beadwork and quiet feet, yet the mention of death brings a chilling and beautiful aspect to it!
    Thanks so much for sharing!

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    • August 7, 2020 at 3:47 pm

      Aww, thank you dearly Jaya. I so appreciate your feedback, it warms my heart. I’m beyond happy you enjoyed my poem. 😃

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  7. August 7, 2020 at 4:40 pm

    NIce. Good work.

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  8. August 7, 2020 at 7:25 pm

    A very morbid poem, that seems to reflect the beginnings and endings of life.

    You can get lost in this sort of imagery! I’ve been re-reading over and over, again, and there’s just so much.

    I like how you expressed a bit of jealousy towards the dead person beneath the earth, naming them to be “roofed”, like not cold by the winter. The twice repetition of the jacket makes me remember the coldness that seemingly only a live person feels, though encompasses the skin of a corpse.

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    • August 7, 2020 at 7:45 pm

      Thank you so, so much. There’s definitely feelings of resentment and jealousy at the dead person in this piece. Such an amazing analysis of my little poem here. I appreciate what you perceived from this piece. Always thankful for your feedback. ❤️

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  9. August 7, 2020 at 7:59 pm

    “In flaming petals”
    Wonderful work 👏

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  10. August 7, 2020 at 11:13 pm


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  11. August 8, 2020 at 6:04 am

    vivid. haunting. full of emotions. epic imagery, too!

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  12. August 9, 2020 at 4:52 pm


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  13. August 10, 2020 at 12:51 pm

    Hey, there! I hope you are doing good. I nominated you for The Leibster Award. Please check out my blog Gratitude for Nominations I for more details.

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  15. May 26, 2021 at 3:40 am

    “I count the bones / and recall a garden /

    and recall / a glass figurine I broke /

    on mother’s dresser / I go into the blue lupines,

    and birdfoots / I leave orange petals

    to go dying / to drown / the sunset” ❤ ❤ ❤

    I’m sad and elated at the same time, amazing Lucy.

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  16. Nick Pipitone
    May 26, 2021 at 9:05 am

    Very gothic, Lucy – I love it! I especially liked the lines:

    “the cemetery is red

    I kill / the time / the winter”

    The use of the backlash between “kill” and “the time” was great.

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  17. May 26, 2021 at 12:49 pm

    orange moon
    big swoon
    gone so soon
    your name
    the light
    is right
    me i m uptight
    my ass
    and conflicts
    with the laws
    of God
    so often
    such a liar
    and a hypocrit too

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