Name her for a death (she is mine).

I slice the moon
curated in summer girls;
I name her for a death

Goosebones, I’d dream
I’d steal the sun
made of la-mancha 
I name her for a death
she is mine

fragile, heart breaking,
I died in April; daisies 
bone-soft, daddy is to the black bridge
the sea
the sun fell apart
I’m held by love

a crèche of the other 
menstruating roses
could not see this 

my own selfish sea
paper-babies 
supposed born as cancers
could not see this;
I couldn’t see this. I name her for a death,
mine
when I can’t forget 
mine
when I do
mine 
when I love her
mine 
where I’m loved.

I slice the moon
curated in summer girls;
I name her for a death

she’s mine.

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Posted for the dVerse MTB prompt: So today we shall write our poem using any style or meter as long as it contains:

1a. Epiphora (aka Epistrophe or Antistrophe). The end line repeats should for the most part be consecutive, although allowances are made for alternates as well as the use of the repeat word with variance. Employ repetitions with the maxim ‘ too often is too heavy’!

Maybe I cheated, but I wrote this 5/24/2021. It was just sitting in my notes, pretty much homeless, until I saw it fit most of the requirements for the prompt.

I just wasn’t bit by the poetry bug today. Someone put me in poetry prison and read me Anne Sexton.



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51 replies

  1. Such stunning images, and the stanza with the repeated “mine” is very effective.

    “Someone put me in poetry prison and read me Anne Sexton.” 🤣 Whatever works.

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  2. Ah yes, the poetry prison- where sentences wither and die. We must all serve our time there, whether we want to or not.

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  3. your prison is a wonderworld of words! Loved reading this – even better on the third reading! Glad the epiphora brought resurrection
    “Goosebones, I’d dream
    I’d steal the sun
    made of la-mancha “

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  4. I know you used the repeating words throughout, but my favorite part was the repeating of mine through the middle, it amps up the tempo and consequence.

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  5. I admire the repetition of the verses, first and last, and the refraining answer of, mine. Yes, mine and death are echoing in your poem.

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  6. Like reading aloud standing on the lip of a deep canyon, words, phrases echoing, bouncing beyond death. I liked “daisies bone soft, daddy is to the black bridge.”

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  7. Definitely makes me want to know more about the story with the two characters.

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  8. You must have had a premonition about this prompt. It fit perfectly with Laura’s prompt! Very well done!

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  9. Mesmerizing and so ethereal. The repetition of “mine” is so powerful! 💕

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  10. Thankfully it found its way out of your notes.

    Powerfully written and moving. I particularly like the descriptions you’ve used, such as “menstruating roses”, which I would have never thought of, yet, land with such force in so few words. I feel like that’s really the pinnacle of poetry, loading up as few words as possible, to be as evoking as possible, whilst still making sense; which you do so very, very well.

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  11. ooooh. morbid and profound. you do have Ms. Plath’s blood running in your veins. mine. mine. mine.

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  12. I sought death once. I went to five war zones. Death didn’t want me. War taught me. All of us are here for a purpose. I did find my reasons to be alive. Powerful words and thoughts shared dear Lucy. I love your work.

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  13. This is exceptionally good, Lucy! The imagery, the hell and torture of it, and also the strength. Thank you for sharing!

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  14. Lucy,
    Absolutely riveting. The encroachment of a dark passion intentionally claustrophobic. Stunning poetry.
    ~🕊Dora

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  15. This overwhelms …. you are a writer!

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  16. My gods but you are an exceptional poet!

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  17. I love this so much… the repetition and the images… both the moon and menstruating roses make this so passionate… maybe even desparate

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  18. Like this Lucy, some vivid images herein. Love the “mine” repetition. Very strong and effective! The same time you wrote this, I wrote really dark one focused at “mine”. http://www.image-verse.com/requiem

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  19. Nice

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  20. A particular favourite, its voice is so natural in my head

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  21. Thank you for sharing. ❤️

    Like

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