None.

It was perhaps disenchantment
Darling, slipping to the sea like a knife;
why abide like children, a bloodline
since dead retiring from goddammned
bones mislaid—I can barely touch
the waves; black doves
splintering in the mistakes upon
their tongues, straying first
feigning none.

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Written for the dVerse prompt: Today’s challenge, should you choose to accept it, is to write a quadrille poem. If you’re new to dVerse or the quadrille, it’s simply a poem of 44 words (excluding the title.) You MUST use the word “abide” in your poem.

Reposted 7/09/2021.




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45 replies

  1. Mesmerizing Lucy, very beautiful ❤️

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  2. Oh! Stunning, Lucy.
    Especially love: “slipping to the sea like a knife”

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  3. Dropping “darling” into the second line is mwah poetry

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  4. “Slipping to the sea like a knife” wow!👏🏼 Is this line about sunset too..? Beautiful poetry, Lucy🙂

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  5. “splintering in the mistakes”. Love it.

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  6. I love the disjointed alliteration in ‘disenchantment / Darling’, and the wonderfully Gothic image in the lines:
    ‘…black doves
    splintering in the mistakes upon
    their tongues…’

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  7. This is just-
    I have no words O.o

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  8. To choose not to abide…that is a rejection of ancestry, both past and future. I never thought of it that way before. (K)

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  9. ‘disenchantment/Darling, slipping to the sea like a knife’ – fantastic imagery!

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  10. I don’t know why, maybe “bloodlines”, but I got distinct Faulknerian vibes in this quadrille, Lucy. Rich and beautifully dark

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  11. All my favorite lines already pointed out above… love the dark ending with the black doves.

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  12. This is incredibly mesmerizing, Lucy! 💝💝

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  13. Potent and looms in my mind, such powerful imagery.

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  14. Great images of “I just can’t take it any more!” Slipping into the sea… feelings gone along with the splinters of life as the soul leaves the body!! ?? :>)

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  15. All the wonderful lines have been pointed out and I love this. Separation from a bloodline no longer worthy, is what it feels like.

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  16. Lucy, did I miss your poem the first time through?? I think abide was a prompt I did? My apologies for not seeing this when you first posted it. It’s intense! Black doves splintered in the mistakes is something I need to try to wrap my mind around….

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  17. Well, so many thoughts but simply, its really nice!

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  18. ‘slipping to the sea like a knife” oh I will remember this line, but love every line actually!

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  19. I get a generational curse vibe from this and think of my disfunctional family in particular lol but in all seriousness I really felt the unforgiving sharpness of your words. ❤

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